Logline: A twenty-first century Tarzan story. After an English blueblood hedge fund manager and her American lover, a lawyer, each freeze theireggs for future fertilization, the eggs are switched, and when discovered sixyears later, the lives of the parentsand children unravel.
Script Type: Television
Genre: Drama / Sci-Fi
Length: 44 pages
Est. Budget: $1M - $5M
ONEHOUR DRAMA PILOT EPISODE THEME: In the battle for Soul, genes make no difference.
Conceived is a series designed to highlight recent developments in gene editing and embryo enhancement with an emphasis on the debate over whether personality is determined by genes or environment.
The protagonists are two women of opposite pedigree: KAYLA HITCH, 20's, is an environmental lawyer of mixed race who is all natural, not tech-savvy or good with money, and not well-traveled. VICTORIA CROMWELL, 30's, is of royal blood, runs a hedge fund that includes some of the Queen's wealth, and pilots her own Learjet around the world making blockchain deals. The two women become lovers and, at the end of the Pilot, decide to freeze their eggs in order to have children later with surrogate mothers.
The antagonist, PROFESSOR MATTHEWS, 50's, owns the cryogenics lab where the eggs are stored, and hatches his own plan to create a royal-blooded child with his genes and those of Victoria Cromwell.
The show has international feel, bringing the audience into the rarified air of high society with a set up providing for arich, soapy drama. The series is ultimately the story of the lives of the children, none of whom know their actual biological parents, and how they relate to each other and their parents and grandparents. The first season sets up their planned births, from gene editing to embryo enhancement, creating an engaging journey into a unique world of intriguing characters where multiple layers change meaning to provoke emotion and invite obsession.
The series presents an ongoing theme revolving around the nature or nurture debate. In future seasons, Victoria's son, from Kayla's egg, is raised as if she is of royal blood, but is actually not. On the other hand, Kayla's son, from Victoria's egg, is of royal blood but is raised in the Everglades by a Miccosukee Indian shaman. Professor Matthew's daughter, with Victoria's genes becomes a child prodigy who detects the presence of her brother and tries to locate him. Finally, Victoria is cloned without her knowledge.
The story is set in a big, colorful world with many pertinent contemporary avenues to follow into the future. Creative characters offer a modern day sci-fi, supernatural soap opera with secrets, moral issues,unpredictability and the potential to be a binge-worthy experience that can last many seasons.
From screenplay contest judge's coverage of the pilot: Solid pacing and a plot that constantly keeps the reader on their toes. We get the appropriate highs and lows as the right time to build up to a satisfying conclusion. Dialogue is sharp and packed with character that makes it easy to tell who is speaking without reference to the character heading. There's a solid structure in place to keep the narrative running, and the script ends with a hook that has me wanting to read more. If I could get my hands on the next episode, that's exactly what I'd do.
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About This ScreenplayGood Coverage from a judge from the Chicago Screenplay Awards contest:
Clone stories can be a dime a dozen, but Conceived manages to stand out thanks to
some impressive character work and shakeups to the formula without sacrificing
the elements that make clones such a rich source of content. Questions of personal
autonomy, scientific morality, and technological progress are all present in this
script even if only appearing tangentially. It makes for a read that’s more than just a
fun popcorn muncher as an audience is forced to grapple with heady themes that
stick in the mind well after the final page.
However, it is the characters that give the script distinction largely due to an
interesting lead in Victoria. Shallow as it may sound, her profession really makes her
stand out. I can’t remember reading a character who deals with blockchains on a
daily basis. Her professionalism and knowledge of the field is apparent early on with
a lot of mathematical jargon, but so too are her struggles to connect with people.
This is a character who thinks a mile a minute, but doesn’t always pick up on social
cues. It makes for a lead that endears an audience to them with obvious competence
and intelligence while also providing a flaw for them to overcome. It amounts to a
well-rounded character, that’s really just one of a cast chockfull of well realized
With solid pacing and a plot that constantly keeps the reader on their toes, there’s
not one specific aspect that holds the script back. We get the appropriate highs and
lows as the right time to build up to a satisfying conclusion. Dialogue is sharp and
packed with character that makes it easy to tell who is speaking without reference
to the character heading. There’s a solid structure in place to keep the narrative
running, and the script ends with a hook that has me wanting to read more. If I could
get my hands on the next episode, that’s exactly what I’d do.